Basically, I'm begging for constructive comments regarding chapter 13. For one reason or another that chapter has been coming back to haunt me. We've edited it numerous times, and each time I think we're done with it it seems to find its way back into my "not done yet" file. So I'd really like some feedback on it from anyone who is willing to give it.

I don't want to be too specific about my most current dilemma with it for fear that I'll make the reader see problems that may only be in my own head, so I just ask for honest comments and first impressions. Namely, was there anything about it that made it difficult to read, and if so, what specifically? (i.e. If you were to rewrite it, what might you change about it, if anything, to improve the flow or content?)

I know it probably seems odd for an author to openly ask something like this while posting their story, but I'm in earnest. I'm really in need of some other points of view on this particular chapter. Thank you in advance to any soul kind enough to answer my plea.